Work in Progress (?)

Well, it's been a long time since I've had any time to post, so I'd better put something up just to keep the thing alive.

Here's a poem I've been carrying around for awhile. I'm not entirely satisfied with it, but I can't think of any further work to do at the moment, so I thought I'd put it here and see if anyone has anything to say about it. If I either decide it's ok as is or do any further revision, I'll let y'all know.

Full Moon at Dusk

A huge pale orange
moon hangs low
in the eastern sky
slashed exactly
across the middle
by clouds. It
disappears as the
train moves on then
reappears higher
and whiter, perfectly
round and clear,
a snow moon.

February 23, 2005

Comments welcome as always.